Tuesday, April 21, 2009

wow...

okay, Mrs. M gave me a long list of words and I used them to write a poem; turtle, cup, under, broken, sky, gleam, peaches, table, warm, step, water, photograph, hero, gold, feather, reply, line, silent.

here it is...


The hero stands before the crowd,
A gleam in his eye,
Beautiful, with hair dark gold, like peaches.
He, who's cup has always been full,
His foot rests upon the
Broken villain.
Our villain, who has been
Quiet as a turtle in his shell,
Found, when he let loose his voice
Those who, like he, were trapped
Under the hard step of man
Followed hiim to the table in
An attempt to reach their
Place in the sky.
And now, they see their villain
In a newspaper photograph,
With the hero's foot upon his throat,
His gold hair feathering in the wind,
Pressing our shamed leader's
Face into the dirty water.
Our reply is to simply,
Silently line up to
Warmly, quietly help our
Hero to his feet again.



kay, yeah, I know it sucks. but I had a list of words and a challenge to fufill. MUAHAHAHAHAA!!! and I win. Just because it's a terrible excuse for an attempt to tell a story in kind of sort of a poem form...

xoxoxoxoxo ♥♥♥
Brii333

1 comment:

Okie said...

That's always a crazy exercise. It doesn't usually provide awesome work, but it is a fun way to get the creative juices flowing and to come up with something that can then be tweaked into something very cool. Now the trick is to decide which elements you really like and can twist together and which can just be tossed. There's a cool story thread running through that poem that has some good potential and some cool imagery as a result of the challenge.